Wow i love this, you caught my attention with the first line. I love how this flowed, it was beautiful. Also, you didnt try to sugar coat anything, you were very point blank, and the simplicity worked. Keep 'em coming this was awesome. XXXXX
JL

From one writer to another, it sounds like an excellent beginning. Nice job!

You have captured my interest with this read Katie as you have also captured my heart many months ago with your heart warming personality .
I wait in anticipation for the next read from the heart of Katie .

It has been forever since we chatted Katie and must get in touch again soon.
Much love, dear friend .

Katie I think this is a magnificient start...I liked how you started with the present and then kinda went back to tell the story of how the character ended up in the present. Let us know when you post another page so we can continue to read as you write!

This was really good. I hope you post the next few pages because when i finished reading this, i just wanted to keep going. Keep writing! =D

Me too please let me know when u write the rest! it was intiguing! really good!