Beautifully written. What a wonderful grasp of what almost everyone faces from time to time.

This line:

I hold on to that tiny string of hope

I would change to read:

Holding on to that tiny string of hope

Reading it out loud, I thought it flowed better. That doesn't take away from the fact that this is a passionate, beautiful poem. Good to read a new one from you. Great job!

Very nicely done. I like your write here Mary. A great job!!!

I love that last two lines. they are especially powerful. i also like the organization of the poem. its different and it calls attention to those lines. and besides that, it is really great.

Cuddles I really like the format and the way you arranged the rhymes.The flow was great and it was a most enjoyable read.

Hey! that was an incredible poem, very powerfully written, great work! yep i posted another poem :) it was nasty seeing that poor horse, i love them too! anyway, hope ur ok, take care and keep up the fab writing!
xxEmma xxxxxxxx

Great job! Such an unusual rhyme scheme but it worked great! I have one called Insanity. Lol Don't know if you'd like it or not, but it's similar to yours. Good job!
Charisma*