Its on the short side but is really good and too-the-point. ;) Cant wait to read more

you didnt really stick to a rhyme scheme, but it still flows good. it is short but it is to the point so that doesnt matter.... i liked it

THIS POEM IS ACTUALLY REALLY GOOD SO KEEP ON WRITING! THANX
~RACHEL~
THANX FOR CHECKING OUT MY POEMS TOO!