Wow.....its short and doesnt directly say "she burned herself w/ the cigerette....yet its so obviously there.....i love the way u did that!!!! well done! :-D 5/5

Short but effective!
Just few words used to tell a story.
I liked it.
Well done =)

It shows you that a poem doesnt need to be long to get a point across, you did thia with great style

This poem is short and sweet, I like it alot. I think it tells a whole story in just those few linmes you have, it's great. I'm sorry you are going through this and if you ever need you can takl to me. 5/5

lots of love
*~*Becky*~*

Wow-- super short poem. Surprisingly meaningful for its' length though. Nice word choice, and your choice to keep it at this choice was wise-- it works well because it says she "hides," so it would make sense that not much would be said. (or at least it makes sense to me)

Nice work! 5/5

Short but it conveys a lot of hidden emotions...

Short, simple, but very clear and emotional. Great job, keep it up

Great write! My favorite lines were the last ones:
"Now she smiles,
"The pain lets me know, I am alive""
^^Great wrap up to the poem!

5/5 Keep it up and Stay Strong--

Wow...just ..wow. I can relate to this...as i'm sure many other people can. it was short but direct, simple but had a lot of meaning behind it. Good imagery and flow too. Perfect.

"The pain lets me know, I am alive"

^^Some people probably would dissagree. But I completely agree. When I was going through depression.. Which I still am kinda. I use to cut back then though, but only so I could actually feel alive. So that line you wrote touched me more than you know. Cause I know the feeling all too well.

The poem itself was good aswel. Though it was short, it was straight to the point and full of true/realistic emotions. Great job, seriously. Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

Very good on this poem. it's sad, but you did a wonderful job writing it. keep up the great work. 5/5

~Kristina

Sorry, I don't get it. It doesn't grab me and leave me asking questions. There is no prose, rhyme scheme or anything else that would indicate poetry. It feels like a collection of sentences.

The girl you don't see: She cries when alone, hiding the pain. She grabs the cigarette, smokes until it's an inch long, rolls up her sleeve and the pain inside disappears. Now she smiles.

"The pain lets me know, I am alive"

I feels like a paragraph with closing statement for effect to me, not a poem.

Now, I know this is harsh, so here's your chance to prove me wrong. Can you re-write this and make me a believer?

Bret

Oh my gosh. I hope you honestly don't do this. =( And if you do, I am so sorry. I know what it's like to feel like you don't need other people to see your pain, but you need to get it out somehow. Please message me if you need to. =)

The poem...It was short, yes, but it had LOTS of emotion and meaning. I wouldn't change a single thing! The metaphor of having pain letting you know you're alive is a great idea, but a little cliche. I still thought it was well done though. =) xoxo

Samantha

I rly like this one its rly rly good 5/5 keep up the good work!

Hey hunny i know how you feel, great poem keep up the good work and if you ever need to talk im here for you. Please comment on some of my poems it would mean a lot. Again good job,
love cassie xx

You definately have a great poets mind. You're very talanted indeed. Another great poem.

Very unique, and easily understandable. Very well done.
5/5
Thanks for the comment!

God Bless,
Taylor
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This poem is rly good. like mark, i think ur rly talented!

Omg..this reminds me of myself. i've been cutting since i was 13. im 18 now. its very hard... (((big hugs)))

Wow.. this poem holds so much meaning, even though it is short. This just proves that a poem doesn't have to be very long for you to get your point across and express feelings. I'm sure that many people can relate to this. I know I can (except for the cutting). But you did an amazing job on this poem. 5/5