by Samantha Oct 18, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
I believed you once,I believed you twice |
by Jesse Miller
The sylabals don't quite match the other lines and don't stay consistent which throws off your rhythem, and their were some editing you could do with your word choice, but that all comes with practice. With that aside I loved your attitude! you were blunt without being too blunt, and you were angry because you hurt such a mix of emotions portrayed so well - A rare talent... |
Really strong words well done |