Like it, you've worked hard in all areas to make this a polished as you could.

The rhyme is neat and tight, the form is solid the meter flows nicely and the message is not trite.

The only thing I see wrong grammatically is that worlds and wants cannot both be plural, one or the works depending on your point of view.

Bret

Very unique, but very well written. I really enjoyed it. Thanks for the comments they were greatly appreciated. 5/5.

God Bless,
Taylor

Really liked it a lot. Nicely written poem.

Rele well written ... uve worked rele hard for dis one ...5/5

Thats cool, i liked that

This is amazing, your can feel the emotion in the poem!
*willwonme*

"quid pro quo"...what does that mean? Anyways I really enjoyed this poem, although I was slightly confused as to what the theme was...because "the world" is pretty broad.

~jas~

I loved this poem, it was very deep and touching. I am adding you to my favorites. 5/5

Wow! thats all i can say.....so i must put you in my favorites:)