Beautiful sad penned, though simply with every stanza, but writing well with beautiful emotions....

Blessed with the presence
Of honesty and trust
Cursed with the sins
Of sacrifice and lust

the most great words....well done!

I really like this. It's different. The flow and rhythm of this was really good and it held up well. I really liked the last stanza. It was perfect, it seemed to bring the whole poem together and give it an amazing ending. I loved this. Keep it up! 5/5

It might have been long but definately worth the read, it was so sad, so dark and chilling, yet so good. well done, my friend
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Yes, it was very long but it was such a great read that I don't even care it was that long. Lol. Great poem; great wording, flow, and just great everything. 5/5 Keep it up!

Innoc3ntStar

Oh... it as so much emotion, so much pain. This one is a brilliant poem. The flow, the imagery, the words and rhyming.. OH ORGASMIC!!

My favorite line:
A promise returned
A promised return

srsly.
That is god.
I love it. 5/5

Nice poem, very well done,
as far as another title goes, if it was my poem i would have titled

An Uneven Cries

i think that would be a great title...

Ahh.. Goran, the master of love poetry, and also a very creative mind.

Hmm, the first stanza was good, yet bad. "A grave so visited" really didn't make much sense, and also, it sort of eludes the reader into thinking it was meant to rhyme with 'twisted'.

The rest of the poem was excellent. The rhymes and the flow was spot on. The emotions put in were noticeable. Awesome job on this one.

I liked it though you did say "a" alot. other then that this was a great poem.5/5

I LOVED this, it was beautiful.
Just..wow.
I admit I got lost on a couple of words lol, but apart from that, it has to be one of the best I have ever read.

*balancing*
unsure if that's spelled right. I may be wrong.

*An unnerving caricature* love that line!

Great job. Best of yours yet. Flawless!

5/5
~Stephen White

Speaking of cries, that is what this poem made me want to do! I am unsure of the meaning or background of this piece is (if there is one), but it doesn't matter, because the words are so strong and really made me think!

"A promise returned
A promised return
A reason to live
A longing to yearn"

I had to sit and think after this stanza, and for me, that is a good thing!
In short, this poem is among your greatest work!

This...is absolutely perfect.
The first stanza had me completely hooked, and it just kept getting better.
The imagery you used was fantastic, it created vivid images for me.
The flow was flawless, and although I didn't want the poem to end, I wasn't disappointed when it did.
You did a great job with this!

An ignited torch
Waved to remind
The people, their pasts
What they've left behind

Blessed with the presence
Of honesty and trust
Cursed with the sins
Of sacrifice and lust

This two stanzas are so sad and true
You had a good wording
Good job

I liked this poem I liked the alliteration with the A sounds towards the end...it gave it a nice touch I think you did a tremondous job!

Diffrent....... The diffrence is what makes it perfect. I loved the flowit was smooth, and easy, although the words were simple they were powerfully placed in every staza. You did another great job 5/5