Awww! That Was So Cute :) very beautifully dont. 5/5 hun

Done* sorry :)

I hold you close within my heart
And in my arms you lie
I cannot help the way I feel
Nor do I wish to try.

I loved the last two lines in this stanza! Good job! Very sweet and sincere poem! Jpoet*

This is just so romantic, if a guy like me could feels react this, i am sure how all the girls would be feeling....this is really very nicely written....keep it up

all the best and take care

I really like this poem.KEEP IT UP!!!

I really like this poem...KEEP IT UP!!!

Wow, this was wonderfully amazing. It was simple yet so strong. i have felt the same, with love growing each day yet still uncertain of the future. the way you wrote it was just...perfect. and i especially like the very last part. I'm sure she loves you the same. and thank you for commenting on my cancer poem, keep up the brilliant writing.

Great poem lov it

That is such an excellent poem, i love you work!!

Excellent... very sincere and romantic way to propose if i was that girl i'm sure i'd say yes well done mate

crystal

I absolutely loved this poem. It is so sweet and beautifully written. The girl that you wrote this for must be very special. You portrayed your emotions very well. I loved it so much! Great job on this! 5/5 Keep it up.. I hope that everything works out well for you!

Ok, I will I will (just kidding) but how could she resist that! beautiful in every way. good luck.

This is a very beautiful love poem, but it's not one of your best writes. I love the poem, don't get me wrong. But usually your poems are so much deeper and they usually don't have such a cliche' rhyming scheme. The introduction of the poem was very creative and the stanza that followed was ok.

This future is still uncertain
I know not where I'll be
But in the past few weeks I've prayed
That you will be with me.

My love has grown from day to day
I miss you more and more
If love is hurting while apart
No wonder my heart is sore.

I hold you close within my heart
And in my arms you lie
I cannot help the way I feel
Nor do I wish to try.

I know that you may be wondering why I copied and paste these stanzas here; I placed there here because I really do have a point to make. lol

In the second and third stanza, you portray the feeling of being apart from your love. But in the fourth stanza you say that she lies within your arms. So you see dear, you contradict yourself and make the poem somewhat confussing. I am really surprised at this poem. I know that it's supposed to be simple, but it's not like you. You usually let the words flow as if they were a current. In this poem I know what your next line will be before I even read it. It is still a lovely poem though, and I may even would have said it was excellent if you weren't the author. But sense I know what you are capable of I cannot lie. I know that you are an extremely talented poet, and I also know that you have the talent to let the words pour from you like an overflowing glass of wine; fulfilling, sweet, and meaningful. So I hope that this comment dosen't upset you because as I say the poem is still good, but it's not the excellent you. Keep writing hun and next time be yourself. 5/5

Love
Letty

So, was it a yes?

Marvelous piece my friend. I visited this site after a long time, and am I glad that I did. Absolutely breathtaking write, if I was the girl, I'd say 'yes'. :-)

Best Wishes
Michelle

This was really really beautiful a touching piece. the length was perfect. great job keep it up =] xx

::: good joob :::: :-)

Wonderful poem.. this is really gReat.. for a man to do a poem for heR giRL.. i wish i can make a poem like this for may BOY..

This is a great poem by a great poet.... really well written, very nice job... 5/5

This is such a lovely poem i wish i could write like this but well done you truely are a great poet well done luv amie xx

AWW QUE LINDO N VERY NICEW!!!
IF I GOT THAT POEM I WOULD CRY SO MUCH BECAUSE IT IS SO BEAUTIFUL