IF

by Ericky   Oct 29, 2006


If it were possible, i would bring you light
I\'d gather all the stars and lay them down before you
Like a bed of stars

If , i could lift you high up to the night sky,
Little rays would sourround you ;. like flickers of lights all around you
AND ADORING YOU.

IF , I could and it were possible, i would fly you up higher
Soar to the sky and touch with signs of hope , and signs of tenderness
Just for you my LOVE

FOR YOU I DECLARE UNCONDITIONAL LOVE
A LOVE of hope and dreams.
The festival of the stars just for you my love

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  • 14 years ago

    by Fading Memory

    Losey might be right , but as long as the words came out from the burnin passion inside no matter how many lines , or lies...

    keep et up 6/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Grace

    Awwwww this is so sweet!! :D 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by H E Losey

    Nice loving thoughts, but expressed in lines too long. Break them up into more concise parts, don't try to say everything at once. Remember poetry must have rhythm/metre/flow just like music. Use repitition for emphasis not because you have trouble finding a different word. "i" is capitalized.
    This will be a very nice write if you work it.

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