I kinda have or had a poem like this. I liked this. A few suggestions though... I don't really know if you tried using some kind of rhyming scheme or anything, but using different words would help a bit. Like in the 3rd stanza, you used "past" twice to rhyme and stuff...well I don't know if thats what you were trying but yeah, you know what I mean, right? Lol. But yeah, other than that this was a good write. Keep it up!

-Liz

I dont have a F next to my name but when i see a good poem i will be honest to tell other ppl like liz that they dont know what they're talking about.. this is a good poem..all the words were perfect

The flow of this poem was great i enjoyed reading this alot. the word choice nice and the meaning portrayed was amazingly written. The title capturing. Well done~mel

Well, i thought it wasnt going to be very good, and then i started to read it and i thought, "this isnt too bad" and then i finished reading it and i thought this
"Wow, that was brilliant, so not what i expected"
And i loved it! well done
xxxxx