A m a z i n g g g !

Speak ur gift of happieness in ur next poem because im walking on a thin string, a thin string the leads to the path i seek.... i've tryed 2 clime this string but yet i always fall plz help...
PeaCE
anthony

Yeah i really liked this one. especially this line: "But how many deaths will you spiritually die?". occasionally the rhyming was a little out, but only by a little bit, never anything disastrous.

i reckon the only thing that you could work on is making your language and rhyming more formal; thinking beyond simple vocab.

overall this was an excellent poem! :)

What an amazing poem!!! great job. you have talent in expressing emotions, this one especially xx

Wow.. I am speachless.. In the good way of course.. Totally Beautiful..
Love it!

*Kate*

Omg! so amzing , i loved it all, i loved the message too, veryy strong!

---tara