I think you have a good idea but you just need to do some revising to make things clearer

Good poem. Excellent rhyming and flow. Very emotional too.

Great work! 5/5

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:-(.. It must be true to read this but very emotional to read every step of line which is possible it's real feelings.
You did very good on it.

Very good poem,
You made your emotions very clear, that's good.
I'm sorry if this is based on a true story.
But you put the words very good on paper.
Take care

I think you said 'you' a lot of times when you meant to say 'your', but maybe I'm wrong. It was an okay piece. I didn't like the one-word lines in stanzas one and two, as I felt they broke the flow. That's all I think.

Brad

P.S. Thanks for your comment on my pieces.