When Will It Be Enough? [Triolet]

by TaKe Me As I Am   Nov 12, 2006


I KNOW A LOT OF YOU ARE READING/RATING THIS, BUT ID GREATLY APPRECIATE COMMENTS TO GO WITH THOSE RATINGS IN ORDER TO HELP ME IMPROVE (THIS IS ONLY MY SECOND TRIOLET, & THE FIRST WAS PRETTY POOR)- THANKS SO MUCH!!
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When will it be enough?
When will you just let me be?
I am really not that tough
When will it be enough?
Why do you have to make this so rough
And take what's left of me?
When will it be enough?
When will you just let me be?

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*a triolet consists of eight lines, and has a rhyme scheme of: ABaAabAB

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  • 17 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    I too am trying different forms of poetry...I haven't written this one yet, but my only suggestion is that if there is a word other than ROUGH that rhymes and sounds good, use it, because honestly rough sounds a little, cheesy. LOL And thanks for your comment on my Labels Set Free poem. That's why I told everyone to read on b/c it's not what you think. I was totally against labeling, I was just showing everyone what it sounds like. Thanks again! Glad it made you think. That was the point!
    Charisma*

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