Comments : Lacrymosa

  • 17 years ago

    by Cooper

    I was wondering when yo'd write another of your fabulous poems.
    Again, you did such a great job. I love reading your poetry so very very much.

  • 17 years ago

    by Mystic Enchantress

    Awesome write! with a wonderful rhyme scheme. keep up the good work!

  • 17 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Wow, it was hard to realize that this is just an imagination...very powerful indeed

    all the best and take care

  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    As she though she lost him he grabbed her by her hand
    ((thought not though))

    I loved this one. Different from the rest and beautifully written. It captured me until the end. Simply beautiful.

    One suggestion: Get away from 4 lined stanzas. You're writing is beautiful, but if you tried styles I'm sure you'd triumph. But, it is only a suggestion from a fellow poet. =]

    xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex5.5

  • 17 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    It’s said that everyone who falls in the Devils’ trap
    Can hear her jaded voice as she cries in mishap
    “My name is Lacrymosa - I’m the entrance weeper,
    My love wasn’t enough for this wretched demon keeper

    So now I’m bound to suffer through eternity and beyond
    As reward for foolishly believing in the existence of a bond,
    I was mislead by my fears and now I cry my disgrace
    The only thing left pure in me is the tears on my burnt face.”

    ^^^the best part of the poem.

    that is a cool poem. i love reading whawt you write, it keeps me interested.

  • 17 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Another spectacular write.. you dont have one bad poem!

  • 17 years ago

    by Bridget

    Wow i liked that poem A LOT!! it was another great and clever idea, it had great flow, and perfect rhyming apart from one bit..

    "She jumped out the window and started to run
    Tears pouring down her face dirty and ashen."

    run and ashen don't really rhyme, and when i was reading it it had all been flowing so perfectly so when i got to that bit it just jumped out at me if u kow what i mean. but AWESOME poem overall, 5/5 :D

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    This is frikken awesome.
    The whole depth and power in this poem...wow.
    I don't even know what to say...this has blown me away.
    There's not a single thing I would change about this.
    It's perfect.