I will never leave

Wow THis is awesome. It's the best poem I've read in a while. Keep it up.

Laura

This poem is the shizzle!! i love it bro 5/5!! :D:D

The ending seems a bit blunt. "dead" seems a weird word i nthe context. It's hard writing a love poem anyway, because so many have written before you. but you'd benefit by putting more personal stuff into it, such as memories or things you relate to her, thigs that the reader could identify easier with.. like how you say the smile brightens the day.. well thats a cliche and nothing specific about that. it's an old saying we've grown tired of and don;'t actually feel it. Show them how it's bright, how it burns.. don't just tell.. take them into the world of feelings.. and use imagery to help this too

This is great, it's my favorite too!

Hey this is the best one 5/5 all the way colb niccce work!!!

alY