Comments : When You Love Someone

  • 13 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    This is good. Emotions were expressed well.

    "all you want is that they would stay with you and very go" -- The end here doesn't really make sense, and this whole sentence sounds a bit awkward. Maybe change to something such as:

    "All you want is them to stay with you and never go."?

    Anyway, good write.

  • 13 years ago

    by thesexypoet

    I loved your poem, truly expressing your feelings, only the one that has true love can share your feelings on this, thank you for this, i also feel like that....

  • 13 years ago

    by Tiffany

    Hey this poem is sad and yet true! short but sweet! I loved it

  • 13 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I liked this.
    The structure and spelling errors threw me off a little, but I could see the emotion behind the words, and that's what kept me reading.
    Good work.

  • 13 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    You have excellent use aof words in all of your poems, you just need to work on making them longer and the structure of the poem it self. Other than that, the flow is good. Kepp up the good work.

    Peace, Joe

  • 13 years ago

    by Kristina

    Wow i can defiantly relate to this very much. i feel the same way. i'm sure a lot of people do. keep writing you have talent! 5/5

    ~Kristina

  • 13 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    Great read! You have loads of talent. I like the emotians throughtout this one. Had an ok flow. Keep writing! xx

  • 13 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Very good poem and very true. I love this poem for that reason. Keep up the good work. 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Princess of snow

    THis poem is totally true....
    I like it very much