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This is good. Emotions were expressed well.
"all you want is that they would stay with you and very go" -- The end here doesn't really make sense, and this whole sentence sounds a bit awkward. Maybe change to something such as:
"All you want is them to stay with you and never go."?
Anyway, good write.
I loved your poem, truly expressing your feelings, only the one that has true love can share your feelings on this, thank you for this, i also feel like that....
Hey this poem is sad and yet true! short but sweet! I loved it
by Jenni Marie
I liked this.
The structure and spelling errors threw me off a little, but I could see the emotion behind the words, and that's what kept me reading.
by Italian Stallion
You have excellent use aof words in all of your poems, you just need to work on making them longer and the structure of the poem it self. Other than that, the flow is good. Kepp up the good work.
Wow i can defiantly relate to this very much. i feel the same way. i'm sure a lot of people do. keep writing you have talent! 5/5
by Simple Sensation
Great read! You have loads of talent. I like the emotians throughtout this one. Had an ok flow. Keep writing! xx
by Brittany C
Very good poem and very true. I love this poem for that reason. Keep up the good work. 5/5
by Princess of snow
THis poem is totally true....
I like it very much