Comments : Eternal Sleep

  • 13 years ago

    by Cindy

    Wow! The pain can be felt in the words that you write! Excellent! I have been in that alone empty state.

  • 13 years ago

    by Jenie

    Aaww sweety! stay strong!
    alaways here for u!
    this was a great poem!-
    printed it out and saved it
    =)
    ily

  • 12 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    This is so ... dark. I love it. I think the only thing you could do better is puncuation. commas and periods... and on this line:

    So I won't again cut my wrists"
    -Maybe put So I won't cut my wrists." i just thought that line was too long.

    You did an amazing job! Your rhyming was mind blowning! You did a really great job on the timeing too. I usually choose which lines/stanzas I love the best, but on this i cannot choose! You did a great job!

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Clarissa

    I love this poem because its just one of those poems that are just so dark and real goodjob 5/5
    check out my poems =]

  • 12 years ago

    by jello

    Amazing yet again...it's so sad but it's so good. good job! 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenie

    Can we be expecting any new && wonderfull poems soon? lol

  • 12 years ago

    by Laybelled with a name

    Oh my satan! Thats such a good poem, since it's been my dream for a very long time for that to happen to me. The poem was perfect, eveything in it I really loved! I love your writing style it's absolutly darling! I really liked it! You keep writing and I'll keep reading. Really loved it!

  • Another brilliant poem dis is very good i can reali feel d emotions in it.. great job