Very good. I too thought about attempting this one for the contest!
and lol I know about that line in my new love poem
"I was lost in the crowd,
But your hand guided me out."
I knew that one was just a bit off in the flow, but like you said, don't know anything better. LOL! Same brainwave there!
Good job on this b/c it's hard, but honestly, I don't like this type of poem. It's so repetitive and doesn't seem to make much sense. You know?
This is the most complicated thing I've ever read. I can't even imagine how complicated it must've been to write this. I actually liked this, even if I did have to read it a couple of times. Lol. Keep writing! Take care.