Comments : I Try

  • 17 years ago

    by Kristina

    I like this poem a lot. i like how you used animales to describe how you feel and how you can relate to them. great job! 5/5

    ~Kristina

  • 17 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    I dunno why somebody rated this poem so low, but I agree that sometimes no matter how hard we try, we never get ahead in life. I thought it was amazing nice job 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    This was a really good poem, and I liked how you compared difference actions using animal behaviour. Very nicely done.

  • 17 years ago

    by poetals

    Nicely written!

  • 17 years ago

    by Allison

    I liked it....it was great to read and I think that it flowed well. *5/5*

    Alyson

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni

    I really liked this. I liked how you used the animals to relate to your life. my favorite was the race horse and the clouds. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by w!th0utyou

    This is a really really good poem. i'm pretty sure that a lot of people don't understand it but if you read it carefully its undersetandable... anyways i like it and keep it up...

    (thanks for the comment)

  • 17 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Great job. I liked your comparisons. The first stanza had good flow...but sounded a little cheesy on the baby part. The rest of the poem was nice, but the last lines disrupted the flow. Keep it up! Don't let those downvoters bring you down. (I've had scores of them to deal with) They'll get tired of it soon.

  • 17 years ago

    by Bryan

    Great job, loved it, 5/5!!! keep it up!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by mistressxsork

    Aww. That was a wonderful job. I loved the emotion! Good luck with everything you do!

  • 17 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Great flow and i think this is nice and very fabulous

  • 17 years ago

    by - xoxrachellee.;

    I liked your wording in th is poem. But I couldn't help but notice the fact that all your verses have a different number of lines. Somehow, though, it didn't affect the fact that it sounded wonderful.

    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Naima

    Oh this is good, reminds me of wild horses by Natasha Bedingfield... good job

  • 17 years ago

    by Allison

    This one was great. *5/5*

    Alyson

  • 17 years ago

    by Allison

    I thought that it was great. *5/5

    Alyson

  • 17 years ago

    by Allison

    I thought that it was great. *5/5

    Alyson

  • 17 years ago

    by David

    This is great.

    i read somewhere on the board that you love reading poems. why don't you swing by my site.

    i gave you a 5. it was well written.

    David

  • 17 years ago

    by ruth

    Always wanted to tell you that your work is really unique!!! keep writing i am looking foward to it!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Teria

    "I run hard like a race horse.
    But I don't get anywhere fast.
    Sometimes I feel,
    as slow as a snail.
    So time flies by,
    on the wings of a bird,
    And slowly leaves me behind."
    ^ That stanza made the entire poem the best poem I've ever read. I LOVED IT.

    keep it up.
    i've only done twenty, i will finish the rest tomorrow. I need sleep, i'm leaving tomorrow night for a trip. but, i'll get the other 16 done before i leave. promise.

  • 17 years ago

    by Sandra D

    Good job onthis, there's nice imagery! but the flow was a little off and i was a little confused about the rhyming... some of it rhymed and some off it didn't, i don't know if that was an accident or not, but im just pointing it out...

    4/5