Wow...
I thought this was really good.
My favourite part was the last stanza, it hit me hard.
I thought this flowed really well.

That was a really great poem. In the the 3rd stanza you said "I want to take care of me" I think you meant "I want you to take care of me". well 5/5..keep it up.

Awesome Poem!!!!!! 5/5

Wow, that really put a lump in my throat... it reminded me of my cousin and her b/f, beautiful job... you have a real talent, especially writing that type of poem with so much emotion at your age, you woulda thought you were like 18! beautiful really beautiful 5/5

Ooooh I loved it. Amazing. Your flow was very very nice. 5/5

This poem is really wonderful. You really are talented. I am glad I got the opprtunity to read your work. Excellent job!

Wow i really love this poem. its soooooo good.

'I wish that you would take me,
hide me away from reality's lies,
together forever in nowhere at all,
I wanna see the Love in your eyes.'

^^^ that stanza was amazing. i think that the beginning was strong as was the ending.

great job!!

It was a REALLY good poem!!
i really like the last stanza and the third stanza!!
keep up the good work!=]
5/5

Awww so sweet and soo sad.. guys can sometimes overlook a girl's basic needs.. and this was the best explantion and sooo descriptive good job love it!! 5/5

Great poem...very descriptive and a poem most girls can relate to...5/5