This was good! :) keep up the work.

Wow this is really good. i liked the rhymes in it. but one thing that i didn't like was that in the beginning of them poem the stanza's were short then towards the end they got bigger, it kind of threw the flow off. [i do it too sometimes. its hard.] but if you could shorten them a little it might flow better. other then that great job! 5/5

[would you please check out my poem(s) and let me know what you think. thanks]

~Kristina

Beautifullly written and very meaningful, iveadded you to my favorites thankyou for your kind comments on my own poetry. -x- 5 for you

Well dont ever stop i think your writing is brilliant. I liked the poem, a very sad write and feeling of helplessness. Excellent write. 5/5.

Kelly
xx

I really liked this.
I thought the flow was off in a couple places, but apart from that you did a wonderful job.

Alright, for that writers block... take a scrap piece of paper.... and a pencil... and write down everything you see... things you hear people say, and then at the end of the day... reflect on how it made you feel... and just start writing and dont stop... then re-read everything, and take out parts that are stupid, and dont sound right... or reword them... READ MY POEM "a pound of flesh" -- its my favorite... love ya!

That was good! i liked it! keep it up!...thanks for the comment...=)

Wow......that's a very awesome poem! it was very detailed!

Thats really good 5/5 my favorite is "Flyings just like falling,
Well, until you hit the ground"

p.s. thanks for the comment! :D

For one never stop when you have the least little bit of talent.
I thought this poem was great. YOur not as bad as you think.
Keep it up.
Molly
5/5

Very sad poem but i thought it was brilliant, definately keep writing!! 5/5
Leanne xx

That was amazing but really sad. your a great writer please don't stop.
my favorite lines were

"I'm left praying to a god,
That doesn't exist,
And gripping onto a life,
That wont be missed"

Don't worry, like you said to me things will get better.

OMg if you dont have talent knowone does never stop writing that was flippen' awesome

XOKaylaXO

Its really good.... i think your an amazing writter... luvs your work
~tisha~