War poem

Pain, defeat, sorrow,
seeing if theirs tomorrow,
guts, blood, guns,
waiting for the shinning sun,
horses, knifes, rain,
crying with lots of pain,
life, heaven, hell,
in the devil's burning cell,
leaving, living, dying,
i hear no more lying,
like, love, marriage,
seeing you in the dead carriage!!!

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