This is such a sad but very well written poem. The flow was very good and helped to focus more on the words and feel of the poem. I really liked the way that you ended it. It seemed very well thought out and sad. Great job on this! 5/5

Wow.Sad,bt i like the way u so beautifully capture the image of her,writing en waiting for her prince..Good work

POWERFULL cant say any but i love it 5/5

This takes a couple of reads to understand the rhythm and flow of the poem and even when i had done that, i still felt like the poem was often stifled - not sure why though.
that aside, it's a lovely poem. very relatable idea i'm sure and articulated very well.
nicely done, i have to say x

After reading this poem i am proud to have you in my favorite list as you really the greatest.
keep up the great work like always.

Wow, that was very good, i really enjoyed reading it, it was so sad, and emotional
well done
xxxx

Imagery was fantastic! The flow needs a little work but not much. The rhyme scheme works very well in this poem.My favorite lines are

"Wait as she might, her Prince Charming never shows,
writing down her feelings, but the torture never goes."

and

"If my Prince Charming finds this, don't have any fear,
I will die here now with these Porcelain Tears."

Great work! 5/5

Imagery was fantastic! The flow needs a little work but not much. The rhyme scheme works very well in this poem.My favorite lines are

"Wait as she might, her Prince Charming never shows,
writing down her feelings, but the torture never goes."

and

"If my Prince Charming finds this, don't have any fear,
I will die here now with these Porcelain Tears."

Great work! 5/5

Gee. the word you use are so good! they rhyme so much!

i give it another 5! this is one of my favourites. but you need to work on making more poem! yay! cause this is great! excellent.

david

The flow, again really threw me off. I couldn't focus on some of the words, and I was reading them more than once to get the whole picture. Try adding small words, or taking out a few to make it flow better.

[the pain she shows is too much for her to {bare}]
Correction: {bear} The form or 'bare' you used was like saying 'bare naked.' Not 'It's too hard to bear'

Keep in mind that poems need to flow in order to sound alright. I can see that you're just trying to make it rhyme, and that will mess up the poem in the end. Keep it up. =) 4/5 xoxo

Samantha

Wow. this is just amazing. I know that you only told me that i had to review two but i want to read more of your poetry. Just beautiful

Comment #1:

You did SO good on this...and I love how much response you got on it. I mean so many ppl loved it! Congrats on placing...you did an amazing job and you have a lot of fans! :)
~Midnight Sun

Wow. This was really good. I liked it, but one thing: I couldn't really feel her pain.. Like, you wrote it.. but you didn't really show it, or let the readers feel it. But, i do still like it. I can relate, and it was very sad, yet beautifully written. :] Keep it up, Hun.

Bri.x

Hey thank you so much for entering this poem in my contest :).. the first time i read it i just felt like crying, and i so badly wanted to give it a placing as well. If i had a 4th place you would have got it. This poem has great rhyming and flow, and the idea of the porcelain tears is magnificent. My favourite part of this poem is definitely the ending because i think it is such a strong and powerful way to end this poem. Keep writing, you have some great talent.. 5/5 :D xx

Very intriguing poem, it made a sad picture in my mind. I loved the poem.

Wow this is great i think this is my fav by you so far i love the last two lines great job *claps* and thanks for the comment

keenan

=] Bryan!! Awesome!
You've gotten so much better!
>=] I need to catch up.

Very emotional and captivating through the whole poem. I like the descriptions and you did very good job with rhymes. The topic is great, too.
You managed to express all feelings in a great way. The first stanza is my favorite.
Keep up!

Beautiful opening to the poem. Really tender and sweet.

"Writing her final note, no one around to see,
what she's been through, how hard life can be.
So she sits on her bed, with a pen and some paper,
waiting on her Prince Charming to come and save her."

^^^
beautiful part of the poem. Its heartbreaking and sweet at the same time.

"She writes down her feelings, each and every day,
hoping her true love will come and take her pain away.
Wait as she might, her Prince Charming never shows,
writing down her feelings, but the torture never goes."

^^^
That is so true. I can really relate to that section. well written.

Amazing ending. You have a great gift with words.

well done
^_^