by the pale queen of the silent night Jan 2, 2007
category :
Special events /
other poems
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New year |
by Bhavin
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Hi Farah, |
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Dont 4get your s's in your sentences. Fair poem but I couldnt overlook the lack of plural presence in your sentences. Instead of every lips use every face. Put s's at the end of hardship, death, and disaster. |