Hey thanks for ur comment and hey i dont think you need to change the end at all i think it flows well 5/5 keep up the good work

Good poem. Your vocabulary is great! Nice Job!

This poem is real good keep it up

Your vocab is great, i understand what you meant about the end of your poem but in my opinion i think its great the way it is :]
5/5

It's a good poem. You're vocabulary is wider than mine so you shouldn't worry about it too much! I can see what you mean about the end not flowing very well and to a certain degree i don't think it does either, but i don't think you should change it, the fact that it doesn't flow just makes you think about it a bit more.

This is really good and i just wanted to say thanks for compimenting my peom i was just about to give up on peotry because nobody belived in me so thank you so much! I jsut may keep writing now.

yours truely,
Valentina Marie

Great poem! And your vocabulary is good. nice work.