Wow.. this is an amazing poem.. it flows so nicely the only thing i would change is the first stanza because it rhymes and the rest doesn't so it's a little out of place

Honestly, I have a hard time commenting on religious poems because my own views block my perspective. But in a poetic comment, this was well done. Very well spaced and good structure!
Nice.
Charisma*

Walking these steps
She feels her heart beet
It has been long
Sense she has confessed
In this stanza "beet" should be beat and "sense" should be since. Other than that you did a nice job.

I really like this feeling. There's just something about it that makes me really really like it. It's different than most poems. I think that you did a great job on describing everything and I like the way that you didn't tell what her lies were.. it makes the reader wonder about the poem. Great job on this. 5/5

Wow. beautiful poem. There were just spelling errors. Like use of the wrong homophone and such stuff.

Are you still doing my Fairytale contest?

Terra, I read the first one, so I had to come read this one. Minor notes, second stanza, last word first line, "sent" should be "scent"
fourth stanza, second line last word, "beet" should be "beat"
last line in the sanza should be "since" not "sense"

Terra, I read the first one, so I had to come read this one. Minor notes, second stanza, last word first line, "sent" should be "scent"
fourth stanza, second line last word, "beet" should be "beat"
last line in the sanza should be "since" not "sense"

Whoa, stupid computer spazam... lol I was going to say that otherwise it was a great poem. I knew what you were saying it it =]

Ciao