Well done on this poem for your first, i'd thought i's comment to tell you how good it was. check out some of mine if u have time. Well done again on this moving poem

This one is really wonderful. great job, and keep it up--youve got real talent. =]

Wow this is good!!

Its ok, but it sounds like a story rather than a poem

but its a good attempt =)

Wow...niice poem, filled with emotion!=]

Brooke<3

I love this poem. It's amazing.
Tons of emotion packed in.
Keep it up.