Ok the 5th line needs one more syllable, and the 6th line has one too many syllables, but good job for trying, 5/5!!! keep it up!!!

Interesting style of poem. I like how you repeated the words you used before in the last two lines. I liked it. Keep it up. =]

This was good thanks for your comment on my poem "Inner Beauty"

I always wnted to try one of these but i found them quite hard. Well done to you i think this was amazing.~mel

Ahhh--Mhm..I have never seen a poem like this. (I don't get out much. Haha.) Anyway. Lol, enough of my lame jokes. This was good and made sense it was short and really cute. I loved it, very easy to read, not confusing, and over all it was a good read.

Ah, I really like this poem!
Great tyburn! I've never really
tried these. But you did a great job!
God Bless 5/5
Thank you for the comments and rates!
<3Tay(^__^)

Very well written, usually the shorter the poem, the harder, you did a great job, you made it look easy.

Peace, Joe

I tried this once, it was so horrible. Seriously. >:|

Okay.
"The girl had a fearless, scar-less mind,
Lived in darkness, loveless by mankind."
^ The last line doesn't quite make sense. And, there should be an 'a' after in. It would help, and maybe take out the 'by'. Eh.

Other than that it was a good poem. I don't particularly like this stype of poetry, but it was a decent poem.
4/5!

This style was interesting i've always loved it found it hard to write though so first up well done on that. Loved the word choice strong and effective. Well done~mel

Oh. Nice.
I can't do these; I dislike these.
But, you pulled it off.
Beautiful..just beautiful.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

Excellent piece of a Tyburn poetry it is. I have, yet, to successfully finish one piece of it, though.

This piece was rather written well. For something short, it has already encompassed so much meaning. I liked it. =] Nice shot.

All the best and take care.

Cool I just got done writing a tyburn poem. Your's is great. The flow was very good and I liked the topic. I gave it a 5/5.

I really liked this one. Overall it was well written and quite unique. I must try this style now lol. A beautiful write. 5/5

marcella

A very odd style I must admit but I think you made the best out of it and did a good job inventing words without seeming silly or vapid. Another wonderful piece! :)

Wow, truly powerful. i know from personal experience that this form is very hard to write. Well done, truly captivating piece, I like it a lot.
Keep up!