I think you could take out a couple of the "grandpa's" and it might flow a little bit better but other than that nice piece work

Need to edit this and take out the '. so it flows well. but i could read round it and the effect that it had on me was inspirational! 5/5

thank you. your friend always David

Always!

David

This was cute. i think the repitition or grandpa gave it more of an affect. i thought of a little girl who was badly hurt, but super close to her grandpa but was happy hes in a better place.

good job.

Aww, first of all, I'm sorry for your loss. I absolutely know what you feel when I lost my grandma. It's a really good poem. Great job! 5/5

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