I love this one. Actually I love them all . Both Papaws would have enjoyed this poem. I bet Mamaw D would love to hear it. Mamaw F would have been so proud of you and just bragging about how talented. She is smiling down upon us. I love the imagery in this piece. It tells the story of a coal miners day with impeccable rhythm and rhyme. Wonderful dedication to our Papaws RIP to them both. 5/5 to you!
Gosh, Debbie. This was just WOW. I don't know what to say. I love how you wrote this...I could picture everything in my mind as I was reading this. Kinda weird, I started writing a poem a while ago called, "Under The Arizona Sky"...never finished it though. Heh. This poem kinda reminded me of it. Anyways, this was great!! I love it! 5/5
Sry it took so long to make my comments (you prolly forgot I even needed to give you one),lol...I'm really behind.
But I agree with dave...it was really great you could write this for them, you did an amazing job. And I'm sure they would be proud. Keep up the amazing work! :)
Debbie this was a pleasure to read. I loved the way you worked the first and last lines into the story so well - they didn't sound forced or out of place - brilliant flow. And it makes it even more special to know its dedicated to someone you love. Most definitely a 5/5
I thought for sure that I had already commented on this, but I knew I had read it. This is such an amazing write, I related so much to it. My Daddy and my papa jaybird were both coal miners. They lived in W. Va. and lived in Kermit, which is real close to Berwind. I loved this write and it flooded so many memories of the stories I had heard growing up as a teen.