Nice real nice""""""""""""""" i under
stand now what
means, i like the last line the most
its like you set yhe whole poem up just to say that line. YO" GOOD
JOB" sorry the YO A PHILADELPHILA
THING.

I understand what< eyes wide shut >
means, thats the line missing above
i type it i just know what happen to it
maybe its like the movie the FLY
maybe that line going to pop up
somewhere else oooooooooooo
cool lol i got to much time on
my hands DO YOU THINK?

Me likey :) well done darlin. laura xx

You've put together a very addictive poem here, which carried me along to a very succinct conclusion. Sometimes short poems look hurried and forced, but this had a very real sense of contemplation. Well done.