I like it sounds like a murder but then like a suicide luv it

You started off okay...but the first stanza doesn't really fit with the rest...since you have 4 lines each. But I don't think that's too important. Anyways...I liked this poem. The last stanza especially...the way you changed it from the 1st. Creative. And don't say it sucks...cos this was pretty good. 5/5 Keep writing.

-` Liz

Jason
I love it u are so good at expressing yourself and wether it is a sad poem or a dark poem i think u are great at expressing what u feel and what many other ppl may feel at one time or another. Keep up the good work u are doing great talk to you soon!!!

It's amazing Jason!!!! I really felt emotion and it moved me. great work!

Great poem. Alot of emotion.
Good job, keep it up 5/5

WOAH! Jason... Thats like so good. XD ur so talented. None of my poems ryme. Lol. Urs are awesome. 5/5

Aww i like it but its sad your a really writer

Nice Jason I liked it its awesome.... it does have a lot of emotion

Laura

I like it well done 5/5

Wow deep, excellent style...nice authenticity keep it up cant wait to read more, pls comment sum of my stuff thnxs ttyl

lissa

Good poem
lots of emtions
love

''a tear falls from the face in pain
all attempts to move were done in vain
all sanity has gone away
a body left alone in this small place'' that is a really strong stanza along with ''body laid heavily on the ground
slips away without a sound
as a tear falls down the face
darkness takes the place '' lol again and again WOW keep it up babe.

I love this poem, i like your rhymeing alot. 5/5 good job. you feeling know how to express you feeling down on paper.