I cannot find one thing to criticise within this poem, it was so clever n really thought provoking, it really made me think about things, well done

In Stanzas 12 & 13, I suggest you replace 'that' with 'who' in both.....and, in the last Stanza, I think you must mean 'miles'........

That being said.........I now must say.....This is some good reading.......consciousness infused pulp(absolutely no offense....a high compliment, be assured).......good show..........

Dang! thats deep1 awesome!

Hey well done i like this line-(You can't dance in the rain when
nobody cares about the beauty of a
sobbing sky)nice imagry and the way u use ur words makes me see what u feel.

Wow! Thats amazing!

Having just reread this....I really have to say....
Amazing and moving and so well-written....
and it's pouring rain right here right now so......