Comments : The Devil goes to the Dentist

  • 13 years ago

    by Stacey

    Hmmmm maybe im dense but i have a hard time keeping up with who is the one talking. cute poem all the same.

  • 13 years ago

    by Dark Demise

    Haha nice I like it,

  • 13 years ago

    by Jackie

    Ver good and very funny, love to read more of your poetry

  • 12 years ago

    by Dixiedaisy

    I liked this alot. Very cute and funny. The story was quite humorous. Had fun deciphering the roles in words. I suppose it could be confusing to some but I thought it brought something to the message in the story.

    ^^I can show you twenty seven different levels of Hell
    Hmmm, I once lived in Cleveland, seems you did as well?
    Well thanks for your offer, so charming and kind,
    But our stars don't match, we're quite different signs
    And I've had demon lovers writhing in bed
    Who turned out to be snakes who messed with my head
    I've seen things in this room that would bring men to tears
    So your dangerous delights hold me no fears

    I think these have to be some of the greatest lines in your poetry. I laughed so hard and have enjoyed your poetry. The flow was amazing, everything seemed as though it was perfectly rhymed. I love rhyme schemes by the way. However the rhyme scheme did not seem forced at all. Great job 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Lucy Vandenberg

    I really like the way this is put together the poem rolls off the tounge very nicely and is laced really well in descriptive words and I love the ending, very funny.

  • 12 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    Not only is this intelligently funny, I think it's a song...

  • 11 years ago

    by Lu

    With one glass eye, a botox smile and a tarantula named Harold
    Lmaooo I loved this line!

    Quite a creative tale you've woven here Mr.John. Quite an enjoyable read and some very interesting imagery you've painted here.