This poem was good but it could have been better

If I could show
You all my heart
I'd show it all with you

If I could share
My love with
I'd share it all to you

those two verses they didnt quite sound right but other than that the poem was great 5/5

All ur poems rawk bekz! Love u xxx

I don't know why you haven't been getting comments... this is really good, i can really relate to it, thank you xxxx

Aww, quite a sad poem.

It's good, but I'm sure you could have used a wider vocab usage to expand on how good it is.

"Just fad away, far.." - I think you meant, "Just 'fade' away, far..."

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