The Season's First Snow

by christopher dflcs   Feb 9, 2007


Snow falls outside
there's a fire roaring indoors
they found him hanging in a closet

0


Did You Like This Poem?

Latest Comments

  • 17 years ago

    by Renee

    Maybe some people feel better about there poetic ability and are able to like them when the first write them
    ed henderson tsk tsk tsk

    i liked the poem thing it leaves you wantin more

    amberrrr

  • 17 years ago

    by Ed or Ian Henderson

    I'll have to disagree with the previous comment here, and I'll state right now that this is because I'm a bit of a purist. This is annoyingly abrupt, and yet again shows a hint of promise in your ability not just as a poet, but as a storyteller too. And the latter is an art in itself.

    If you can handle a little constructive criticism I would suggest thinking a little longer about the content, and taking a few hours or days over your subject matter. Perhaps leaving it for review after a couple of days away from it. I find this works quite well for me as I often find myself doing some heavy editing or scrapping the poem altogether. Very few feel good from the get-go!

  • 17 years ago

    by LovinMyLife

    Wow in just a couple lines you told pretty much the whole story! That's great talent right there. Keep it up! buh-bye!

More Poems By christopher dflcs