This is a poem that i wrote for my high school love, which has recently been rekindled, wish us luck...

Aww thats beautiful! glad u wrote it! x

Okay, I'm going to tell you why I felt that this poem was mediocre & I want to give you some constructive criticism, because I have noticed that no one else has commented on it and it has almost 200 views.

You started out strong in the beginning, with a grand emotional appeal to many of the viewers, but then your story kind of faded and it lacked.

The flow was thrown off in many places. You need to work on trying to get everything to rhyme in syllables like 7-8-7-8 or something to that affect. Flow is key to a poem, and I felt that it was nonexistent.

You have exhibited great writing skills, it is obvious that this came from your heart. However, from an educational standpoint, it is rather weak.

The ending, was cliched. I will admit however, that I have written a poem that ended in such a way. Not every poem is the best that we can write, remember that. Also remember that it is okay to revise poetry if needed or suggested.

I hope that you do not get offended by this, I was just putting an honest opinion in, because I can see that you have a passion for writing, I just want to try to help exemplify that passion.

Jenni.
Keep writing, & do not get discouraged!

Aww this is cute. i can relate.