I have missed your poetry so much! I absolutely adore your style. It's very raw, in your face, powerful, and creative. I could go on forever about your words. I loved everything about this poem. Especially the random quality it held while remaining inside the grounds of your objective. Great ending!

Tim...this is my power critique...now i am no expert so these are only my opinions and suggestions!

1st stanza:
maybe add something to these lines:

Can't quite remember which
Throwing take-out containers

I feel as if they may need a few more syllables to flow easier (this could just be me and the way i read it)

stanza 2:
first i think you meant sweated not swaet ed...
maybe change the way the stanzas read by moving some words around on the different lines...

Dreaming of clean sheets on Dirty beds
where existence is sweated out
Through pores of remorse
for thelast line i feel like you could use a description word before remorse...posibly anguished...so it would read...
Through pores of anguished remorse

3rd & 4th stanzas:
same as 2nd maybe try realigning the words to read smoother...(now i don't write in this style so maybe that is how it is supposed to be and i just feel like it interupts the flow becuz i am uneducated about this style...)
the ending was strong and i wouldn't touch a thing...give is that extra punch!!

First of Tim, I must tell you that I think this is amazing. The title is perfect because you have no idea what to expect from this poem, and then you read it, and it's like...whoa. I could be wrong, but I think that the whole poem is about regrets-the choices you made in your life that if you take back you would. I think it's about running away from your mistakes rather than facing them, hoping that driving along the road-possibly symbolic for the road of life-you'll find yourself or answers to the questions that you created by leaving.

*High Five*

Definately one of my faves! ;o)