Comments : The Secret I Keep

  • 16 years ago

    by Lu

    We pass each other almost every day
    Not once do I stop to speak
    I get so scared that you'll find a way
    To uncover the secret I keep.
    I knew by reading this very first stanza that I must grab the tissues. This poem just grips my heart Auntie.

    Wonderfully penned as always Jeannie!

    4th stanza, 4th line I think you meant truth.
    I also loved your Spring poem and I am off to comment it now...

    Take care

  • 16 years ago

    by WitherBlisterBurnandPeel

    A wonderful poem in which I can relate to a lot. In fact if I was a talented writer like yourself i would've mistaken it for something that I would've written. thank you for the great read!

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Wonderful write.
    You seem so content with your life as it is
    Filled with women and all of their charm
    But each night as I lay in my lonely bed
    I dream I am laying inside of your arms.
    Excellent job on this poem. I loved the story told here.

  • 16 years ago

    by Romantic Lover

    So I go through the day with glances of you
    And the knowlege of all, I don't speak
    I find comfort in this for the end of the day
    Will cover the secret I keep.

    Great story and sounds so similar to mine until I couldn't hold back anymore and I wrote my first secret poem to him.

  • 16 years ago

    by Sandra D

    Wow, this is really good, you're so talented! i luv the rhyming and the story you're telling, great job!

  • 16 years ago

    by NightSerenity


  • 16 years ago

    by Mezmeryz

    Aww.this poem was real sweet and i enjoyed reading it, although the rest of the poem from the second stanza was quite predictable, the flow was constant, so keep up the great work
    nuff luv xx

  • 15 years ago

    by Mo

    Argh... the saddness of unexressed love. :) I have a similar poem I wrote with Sam (Blank Words) of people who worship from afar. Very sad. Brilliant poem tho.

    (Just one small thing - in stanza four you have a typo "trueth").

    Great job - haven't been disappointed with any of your poems!!


  • 15 years ago

    by Sugar

    Oh!!!!!!!! hOw i lOve this woRk of yours!!!!
    I luV it!!! I luv it!!!! iT really reminds me of sOMethIng!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  • 15 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    I like your poem its very good xxx

  • 15 years ago

    by Jess

    Hey thanks so much for ur comment on my poem: it meant so much :)!
    i love the wide range of diff poems that u write, and i understand the topic in this one...ive felt exactly the same, i esp like the 1st stanza...thats a secret i try to hide every day too! :( xx

  • 15 years ago

    by Serina the Squid

    Fantastic! Good rhythm, and it almost didn't seem to flow at first to me. Good job.

  • 15 years ago

    by Ben

    An awesome poem! I can relate to that a lot. I love the rhymes. Great job! 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Marissa Marzano

    that was great..
    i totally understand where your coming from
    being scared to show your feelings
    i did that for 3 months once..
    i totally rel;ate to this
    well done


  • 15 years ago

    by nufia

    Wow .
    i totally love this .
    can totally relate to this .


  • 15 years ago

    by Barry

    Talent the lines, story....and the flow....... mmmmm 5

  • 14 years ago

    by Sugar

    I rate ur poem every time i re read it and it makes me feel good..
    this is so my fav poem in this network...!!