Hey hunni, welcome to P&Q (I noticed from your profile that you are new.) Glad to see you here. There was a great rhyme scheme in your poem and you wrote with a lot of deep emotion. Something that would add to this poem would be a bit more description or detail. You have a lot of great lines, but their words are vague. Stronger description of your topic would make this great poem even greater. Still, a nice job. Thanks for posting it for us to read.

-Eleesa