Wow, great poem it' sad yet brings a spark of hope.

Wow. This poem was amazing. Describes how I feel these days. How odd. Your poem describes me and mine describes you. 'When we met' was written about my ex boyfriend so unfortunatly I don't feel that love anymore. I really love your work though. It flows so much better then mine. 5/5!

This is perfect.
Flawless flow, beautiful imagery, it created vivid pictures for me, and amazingly written.
I didn't want this to end, but when it did I wasn't disappointed.
It has such a powerful ending, it hit me hard.
Wonderful work.

I really liked this write. darkness is scary in so many different senses. I too fear the dark, which is why I write of it so much. 5/5

Great job on your poem.

When you left me
You stole my sole spark
You left me alone
And afraid of the dark

This stanza really touched me.
Take care Cindy

Wonderful. i really loved this poem. very well written and has so much feeling. i love the last verse of it.

When you left me
You stole my sole spark
You left me alone
And afraid of the dark

great job. 5/5 keep up thr good work, ur a great writter.

and thanx 4 comenting on my poem, it really means a lot. =)

~*~Missunderstood tears~*~

My hand reaches out
Into the pitch black
I feel the pain crawling
Seeping into my back
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This poem gave me goosebumps! ;p I loved it!! Mostly cos I can relate to it in many ways. It sorta reminded me of mine...it's titled the same. Lol. But I like yours a lot. Never stop writing!

` Liz

Wow I love this. . .Great imagery. . .Thanks for the comments. . .

Laura
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All I can say is well done. I really enjoy reading your poems. YOu are an awesome writer! Thank you for commenting my poem and rating it! God Bless 5/5
<3Tayyy

Wow.
I absolutely loved this.
It had so much emotion through out it. And, I never wanted to stop reading it. I tend to do that with a lot of poems, eh.
It was amazing, seriously.
Maybe you could work on puncutation? It had no affect on this poem, but it might on others.

This poem was so... expressive, i totally understood what you were trying to say.. so that was a huge yay for me, as some poems, i read them and i just dont 'get' them, but with this i coudl feel your raw emotions... so well done 5/5

Wow again i am speechless. I liked this one better than the other ones I have read. The flow is perfect, well penned, full of emtions that are strong and raw. Excellent write. Keep up the good work. 5/5

This poem is awsome!!!U did really good! Make sure to keep writing!

Thanks for your comment. Nice imagery, though you try too hard to rhyme on this particular poem, and it creates forced and awkward images on some lines. Otherwise, very good. :3

Oh this is a very touching poem:) The easy flow of words makes it easy to picture.

Simple yet touching.

"I leave the light on at night
Unless the stars shimmer
I feel my chest tighten
When the candle grows dimmer"

^^Not to keen on the "I." or "the" Maybe :

Leave the light on at night
Unless stars shimmer
Feeling my chest tighten
When this candle grows dimmer

"My pulse quickens its pace
Tears flow from my eyes
Images flood my mind
Like deceptions and lies"

^^I like this. I thought the opening was a tad weak but this seems to be getting stronger.

"My hand reaches out
Into the pitch black
I feel the pain crawling
Seeping into my back"

^^Again I don't think you need "I" on the third line, also I wasn't keen on black/back here..seemed like a child's rhyming to me. Reword maybe?

"I am so alone tonight
No one lays beside me
Without the light's protection
I open my eyes yet cannot see"

^^ I didn't like this verse to much, the flow seems all over the place, and again there's a repeated use of "i"

"So grasp my hand
As the sun goes down
Look me into my soul
Refuse me my frown"

^^This stanza seems, well, un-needed.

"When you left me
You stole my sole spark
You left me alone
And afraid of the dark"

^^ I liked the way you closed this piece, what I didn't like was the repeated use of fillers. (I, the, you etc) Maybe:

When you left me
Stole away sole spark
Left me all alone
So afraid of the dark

Just some suggestions.