I enjoyed the format of this the majority of stanzas deal with very oppresive descriptions and then the clarity the escape towards the end
cleverly written well done

This was great and I definitely relate to it.

Thanks for all the comments and votes ^.^
now I'm going to have fun going through and returning the favor. =)

By the way, scary as it is, I understand your profile perfectly ~.~

Oh my, that is amazing! and your only 11? wow, think how good you'll be in a few years? it's just... amzing, 5/5!!!

Mysterious and haunting great job,I think I had that same dream before scary !

Thanks you are a good poet too keep it up!
-chelsea

If I find the way out, I can be peacefully

I think it should be peaceful not peacefully.
Loved the first stanza.

I enjoyed the poem over all. First and second stanzas were probably my favorite.
ps I like your profile. Mash, good show.

I like this one. Its good.

~Sid~

Amazing poem

brittany (MD)

Very creative words and well orginized, this is a 5/5 poem as you really did a great job....... at the beggining you just captured all of your readers attention and you ended it greatly,

keep it up

Huanting poem, draws your attention, great great great ,
ness

Leaving a dent; in my mind. = emit the semi-colon

the lights growing = the light's growing fast

help, but = emit the comma

end; of = emit the semi-colon

light, enter my mind = emit the comma

Sigh, did you do the comma's and semicolon's on purpose? They were in fact pretty annoying. I didn't really enjoy this poem that much. It didn't have any flow... no rhythm... nothing that interesting. A slight uniqueness but... that's pretty much it. Not the best poem I've read, but nonetheless a 5/5.

Well done,
5/5
~Stephen White