I like the repeating of the line "We can`t go on any longer ." For me, it gave it a stronger meaning and just jumped out at me . I normally don`t like free styles, but I raelly liked this one . I could relate & understand what you were writing . I loved the whole [ ] thing & the words written within those . The whole poem was just ah`mazing . Maybe it was how I read it, but the flow wasn`t great . Mediocre , but the words & all were just whoa` .
Well done (:
..__MiNDYY

Did you know this poem is called a kyrielle. Kyrielle is a poem that consist of a minimum of 3 stanzas with the last line the same in each stanza. Just thought I'd let you know if you didn't know. But a great freestyle poem. Keep up the awesome work. Thank you for the comment and rate!
God Bless 5/5
<3Tayyy

I could relate & understand what you were writing . I loved the whole [ ] thing & the words written in those. yuo wrote a great poem again and i really like your style of writing and the way you put your all into it. great great great.
nessa

Wow! that was a really good poem!!! so full of emotions it soo sad when stuff like that happens! i could really realte to it! but dont worry it was for the better of things!! 5/5

Breezy.. did the same thing that happened to me happen to you? Did you just get out of a relationship, or are you just so amazingly talented that you wrote this one up on your own. Lol, well even if this really did happen, you are still talented enough to write amazing poetry! Really like how you twisted this poem. It sounds really sad, but at the same time, it's expressing love. Don't know how you do it, but it's awesome!..

I like it loads!!!
brill job!!
:D

Aww this is sad! I loved it and I can relate that's why I loved it nice job and great freestyle!

Again dear, take the time to write out "and"

***Fighting continuously [it's like we never stop]
Yelling & screaming, throwing things at each other
Spending nights alone - - crying myself to sleep
We can't go around pretending any longer*** = good idea but bad way of bringing it up. I suggest making this one verse two separate verses and correting the flow and the wording :-)

I like the repetition of the last line of each verse though!

& always will = and YOU always will.

Good poem though... despite the petty errors, it managed to strike a thought inside of my head...

Great job!

5/5
~Stephen White