That is such a cool poem!!!
i love the sound of thoses eyes!
thats some very talented writing!
keep it up!!!
5/5
kat-x-

*,,Great poem. Very powerful. Excellent rhyming, was a little choppy in some places though. But overall it was very well done.
Keep it up && Thanks for the comment,,*

5/5 very deep poem.

I love how you put so much of love in this, how you show that you love her, is this like saaying something about someone like is there really a girl? she sounds lucky..

I liked the reptition of "My Death Won't Be In Vein" in this poem. I loved the last staza of the entire poem, i think it sums everything up really nicely and works so well. Thevocabulary you used was really great, i liked the "Pearl Black Eyes" it creates good imagery. But you know if you do die, it acctually will be in vein. Thanks again for your comment on right then right there. Take care xx

Wonderful 5/5. its great, that girl is really lucky =]

Im not sure if i like how is isnt stanzaed.... but the wording is good but the flow could use some work....

I like the repitition, however some of the rhyming seems a bit forced. Just work on that.

Tht's a great write!...beautifully penned!...good choice of words!The repetition gave the poem a good effect!..lovely Poem filled with love!...Kp it up!
xxPoojaxx

There'sn a ton of voice in this poem; nalmost like I can hear you saying it. the rhythm throughout is something unique, and I like it. amazing work. 5/5

I loved the repeation, although some of the rhyming seemed a little forced to me. Excellent word choice dripping with heartfelt emtions. Again you have done a brillant job 5/5

Wow outstanding. Really lovable piece how beautifully the feelings are expressed, I am really impressed. V true words of love. 5/5 u deserve. smile 4 me by checkin out my 'fart is an art'

Wow I really liked this poem as well, such a creative story line to this poem. What I liked the most was the dark angel trying to steal the eyes of a young soul. What I really liked was how you showed the angel getting angry while the person in the poem still grasped on and denyed it access to the person who's eyes were black as night. AMAZING! No other word to describe it. You have a gret touch when it comes to dark poems keep it up.