Well first of all...i think this is a very well constructed poem...though u have a little spelling mistake im sure u found out...(common)...couldnt change it huh....happened to me..had to delete the whole thing and post it all over again...
really liked the repeatition...i shall check ur other poem now :D

Hey well thanks i am glad u liked it....and as far as the spelling goes well i am really a horible speller! I am gonna delete it and try to write it again with out spelling ereas this time.

I like the repetition something i havent manged 2 pull off yet
good job
tc