My oh my....ur really 11?
well...if i didnt know that it would've rated this 4/5 !! amazing...but taking ur age into consideration...defiantely a 5/5...good work...keep it up...and think where ud be in a couple of years!
I actually kind of liked this. The wording you used was simple, but the effect was that it was almost like a poem translated from, say, a song written in another language into English. Like there could have been rhyming, in its original form, but through the translation it got changed - and what remained was a subtle, almost chanting rhythm, suggesting that you only saw the surface of something that went deeper. I'm not sure if that makes sense, but that was my impression when I read it : )
Wow amazing........! i keep on reading it i would adore how u wirte it was so great and very nice words and rhyme really great! this poem is really impressive im sure some readers would leave some very lovely comments...keep on writing and keep it up !5/5
â€¦You're 11? Ok, I'm sorry, it's just difficult to comprehend and have it register in my head that an 11 year old has better talent than most writers of my age or even above. Hah! This is just phenomenal! My word, this is a doubtlessly well written piece, youâ€™ve explored thematic language and profound imagery throughout the poem. The structure and flow within the write is constant, and I am delighted to have found you and your work. Brilliant piece, young man, keep it up and you will be a greater success one day :).
P.S: I know I won't be underestimating the ability of people who write at your age, or younger. This site actually requires more individuals such as yourself and work like yours. Well done, once again :).