Comments : If You...

  • 17 years ago

    by Laura

    I like your originality the most! you have chosen a topic that all can relate to and you have presented these tough ethics in an enjoyable read...great job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Kurt

    Great poem. The feeling and emotion really showed in the rhythm of the words. I thought this was an amazing write.

  • 17 years ago

    by Romantic Lover

    So many people in pain
    Yet to most it goes unheard
    Why is helping them so unthinkable
    Why does caring seem so absurd?

    What a message this sends. So often we don't stop and think of others and just walk away.
    Nice job.

  • 17 years ago

    by Fredy

    A great message put into a great poem.

  • 17 years ago

    by Kalgalath

    This is really good example of how our society is turning out today. gets the point across.

  • 16 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    Wow another real good write. It again may open peoples eyes. And again you targeted more than one person. i really like your poetry and i think youre ready to be published hope good comes out of your writing.

    xxx alex xxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Awesome!!! i really appreciate this poet is kinda realize me a lot about life and its my pleasure that i read this one.. i would really like the message from the beggininng to the end.. and it really means a lot to me... great job! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Mo

    Very powerful poem. If only everyone could be like that in this world then all our problems could be solved! Pity this world is getting more selfish as time goes on...

    Good piece. Nice and thought provoking. :)

    Mo
    xx

  • 16 years ago

    by Loved In Hell

    Emotion in each word so thoughtfully put together very nice write great job
    laura

  • 16 years ago

    by FallenAngel

    As expected, this measures up to the excellent quality of all poetry you write. You have an amazing gift, and your work really is deserving of publishing, though it could be understood if you wish to keep such work to yourself and your friends.

    Surpasses poetry, becomes beautiful art that will exist forever.

  • 16 years ago

    by HUGIYDAWY

    Wow.
    this is amazing.
    you touch on a subject which, like everything you just explained, will most likely be unheard.
    i loved the poem, its brilliant.
    its just a shame that society today will read this, think about it, feel bad, then move on.
    and when it comes down to it, they will not even stop to consider what has been so bluntly spread out across the entire world.
    but i liked it. i listened and its brilliant.
    you have a unique way of writing and its awsome.
    much love .xx

  • 16 years ago

    by Boy

    I loved your poem. great style of writing. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Veamm

    Excellent!

    Nicely penned, but some lines, i think it was force especially the last lines, but it is still a nice piece you'd written. One more thing i like you're concept and ideas..it was a great piece!

    keep it up!

  • 16 years ago

    by Jessica

    I love you poems !!

    their AWESOME.

    omggs !

  • 16 years ago

    by alwayssofresh16

    Great poem ... you really get the message across. good job