Oh wow what a fantastic poem, so much feeling and emotion in it. wel done xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

Hey,
Thank you for your comments on my poems there much appreciated! ANywyas all the itme when you wrote;
"cutting,hurting,killing,"
I think it should of been cutting, hurting, killing" it would just look less clutered.
Anyways i loved that repition, it worked really well and extended the point you made. Anyways the flow was good and good vocabulary. So yeah a good read, keep it up! xx

The emotion in this poem is spectacular however the rhyming scheme is totally scattred the first 3 lines dont rhyme at all it then goes to everyother line and then to everyline... and afterwards it just contuines being scattered .. other than that it is filled with emotion :D

With honesty, I'm not really found of cutting or sucidal poems. Some are good because: though they share the same topic, they are written differently than the rest. Yours was (no offense) common. Perhaps some metaphors and similies will help

This is by far the best poem of yours i read. I think u do really well writting sad poems to love poems but in my opinion sad and dark are always alot stronger. Well done with this the imagery was quite unique. ~mel

Wonderful poem...i totally relate to it...

*isabel*