Ever...?

by Xx Eternal Fantasy xX   Mar 22, 2007


Ever felt you been used and betrayed?
Around every one you felt afraid?

Ever felt like real friends were impossible to make?
Feeling like every one is so fake?

Ever wanted to drown yourself every night in the lake of tears that u make?
because you think your life is just another big mistake?

Ever wanted to stay away?
because you feel like your gonna be hurt anyway?

Ever cared about some one but needed to let go?
Because you didn't want him/her to hurt you and break your heart too?

Ever wished upon a shooting star before you sleep that you wouldn't wake up again?
Because you feel like your just gonna keep on feeling the pain?

Ever felt that your memories shouldn't be there?
Because you feel like crying at the happy ones and cutting yourself because of the sad ones and knowing they're always gonna be there?

Ever tried to trust?
But then you notice that people's lies are a must?

Ever been hurt so much you feel like your being torn apart?
Wanting to careless and stay away from everyone from the start?

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  • 18 years ago

    by Vanessa

    This one is really good too. The emtions are strong, and you raised some very good questions. I have no doubt in my mind that you deserve 5/5 for this poem

  • 18 years ago

    by Sara

    That was so good!!...i loved it.. 5/5 from me.. comment backkk haha

  • 18 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    Another good one.
    Not great because again in places your flow was off.
    The lines were too long.
    I think if you went through this poem & tried to improve it it could be excellent.

    The ideas you have are great.
    I love how its all questions and how theyre phrased.
    Just try perfect it & itd be great.

    =)

  • 18 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    I like how you used a number of questions. I, myself, have opted to ask questions in my writing. I find it works as a way to convey how you really feel inside.

    I liked it. Nice work.

  • 18 years ago

    by Carmen

    It was good and strong in the beginning, but towards the middle, it started to not rhyme and then started to rhyme again, which messed up the flow. and some of the lines were too long. but otherwise, nice poem.

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