This is a good poem, you have a good talent here so keep writing. take kare xxxxx

I liked it.
Once again the imagery was good and the flow was good.
You have a talent.
Keep it up 5/5

[Sarah]

The imagery was really good once again, and the emtions were strong enough that I could feel them. You did a great job, writting this. 5/5

A great poem...short yet well penned!....save a few puntuations i did'nt find errors in the poem as such!...Good imagery!!..Nice job!
Kp it up!!again a 5/5!
xxPoojaxx

Good poem, flow was good! well done! I like your style in writing! you're really talented! I enjoyed all 6 of your poems :) keep writing! and thanks for the comments! TC

Try and capatilise your I's...

I thought this was okay but found there were alot of fillers in this *(I, you, and, etc) Try eliminating some of those to make the flow go better.
The other thing I noticed was that you used the word 'me' alot, it distracted me from the overall poem.

Apart from that, I liked this, it was beautiful yet sad at the same time.

This is really good, what a sad ending though!!! it flowed really well and i thought it was really good!! :D
5/5
- ali xxx